another one

[jboyce]

made anotha track, sorry i know most of you dont give a shit, but this is the only source of feedback i get on these tracks i make. so lemme know what yall think ight.

http://s92198702.onlinehome.us/regret.mp3

[npor]

it sounds really good to me man.

that's real cool you do your own shit, i've got alotta respect for people who actually record stuff.

[d112crzy]

sounds good.

Try to keep on beat with your rhymes. Do you just spit or do you follow the counts in each bar? If you're gona flow, make sure its crisp.

for instance, you start flowing in 1/8ths then you just drag or speed up a bit. I know you try to put triplets in there or something, but make it crisp sounding or else it just sounds off beat.

besides that, it sounds really good man. good lyrics too.

[jboyce]

i usually just spit, this is only my fourth track i've made, so i'm still new and learning alot about all of it, i gotta lot to learn bout stayin wit beat an all that but i'm learnin more an more wit every track i make.

what you mean 1/8ths? triplets? Sorry i'm seriously new to this

[d112crzy]

its beats.

in a bar, or measure, you have 4 beats(thats the most common one, 4,4 time) which is what your song is.

here's more into detail about music notes and beats.
http://www.musictheory.halifax.ns.ca/6measures.html

1/8 is an 8th of one beat. not necessarily a second, or half a second. the beat depends on your tempo.

This is just stuff you have to learn if you really wana get good at it.

You have talent to write lyrics and make your own music. Now you gota work on the principals and make sense of the music you make.

[mozzandherb]

Sounds good man, I couldn't really listen to it too loud, but from what I've heard it sounds good. I would love to sing, I can write I just can't sing