so i layed some shit on a track but I cant think of anything for a chorus, if anyone here raps or anything ide appreciate any help, i jus need a chorus, if you listen to what i got you can see where i need it. this is my secon time recording a song so ya, i'm still learnin.
http://s92198702.onlinehome.us/ab.mp3
lyrics:
in city streets
where the cities shameful sleep
where the weak are the sheep
an dey hide behind deceit
those fools neva say feed us
cause although they need stuff
they struggle to speak up
sayin fuck the freedom
we worked so hard to protect
ignorance is neglect
its continuously in effect
this city should take a breath
breath for a second
i'm tryin to write about the mess were in
maybe you cant read the message
so on your voicemail i left it
my tears of sin were washed away
with those tissues that i use
hugs keep gettin construed
and his love gets misused
ya this war with love is cruel
but we all gonna die in the end
reminiscin on kisses n friends
but im jus pretendin it aint shit
cause i can see the picture
that shit sits encrypted
when it spoke its message i listened
how dare you say im pretentious
i often pursue the elusive
some would say im stupid
but it my mind starts to loose it
i'm just blame it on cupid
chorus: ??
so back to the matter at hand
i close the book on the chapter
that so few undastand
why my lifes deprived of laughter
take a walk in my mind
i often talk with my otherside
when my mother nearly died
i spit at the sky
i dont know what i woulda did
if i lost any family or friends
it would bee like bullets to the head
i already been stabbed in the chest
she easily took my breath away
but i was competing for her everday
then i got sick inside
an now she sits in time
sometimes i miss her smile
sometimes i miss her kiss
sometimes i try to forget
because ignorance is bliss
thats why fools fall in love
the wise dont wanna get crushed
but i was so intrigued by a touch
but i'm done talkin bout that stuff
but i have moved on
an im attemptin to remain strong
but when i hear a love song
i gotta change the station
why is this world so impatient
by exposin this words
i feel i'm showin myself naked
now i'm religously faithless
chorus: ??
ambigiously interpreted
if you felt these words youd hurt
an nobody deserves to feel what i converse that is certain
paint a picture of the sky
continplait how were livin to die
you should mimic a mime
cause im so sick of ya lies
when she sings that song sound so sweet to me
but i see evil in her eyes body to weak to retreat
speakin through the phone my demons on the other end
he tellin me concur or i'll kill yo family n friends
this is exactly, when, my instanity sets in
i take a deep breath and begin relaxin
but i'm gettin my ass kicked
by the conceptual demons,
as i'm searchin for freedom
but i reall jus need love
to open his door for a second
my chest is bein arrested
gettin dificult to breath
ill be the first contestin
whose only weapon is speech
i pursue that life, yo i neva had as a kid
but other families did,
http://s92198702.onlinehome.us/ab.mp3
lyrics:
in city streets
where the cities shameful sleep
where the weak are the sheep
an dey hide behind deceit
those fools neva say feed us
cause although they need stuff
they struggle to speak up
sayin fuck the freedom
we worked so hard to protect
ignorance is neglect
its continuously in effect
this city should take a breath
breath for a second
i'm tryin to write about the mess were in
maybe you cant read the message
so on your voicemail i left it
my tears of sin were washed away
with those tissues that i use
hugs keep gettin construed
and his love gets misused
ya this war with love is cruel
but we all gonna die in the end
reminiscin on kisses n friends
but im jus pretendin it aint shit
cause i can see the picture
that shit sits encrypted
when it spoke its message i listened
how dare you say im pretentious
i often pursue the elusive
some would say im stupid
but it my mind starts to loose it
i'm just blame it on cupid
chorus: ??
so back to the matter at hand
i close the book on the chapter
that so few undastand
why my lifes deprived of laughter
take a walk in my mind
i often talk with my otherside
when my mother nearly died
i spit at the sky
i dont know what i woulda did
if i lost any family or friends
it would bee like bullets to the head
i already been stabbed in the chest
she easily took my breath away
but i was competing for her everday
then i got sick inside
an now she sits in time
sometimes i miss her smile
sometimes i miss her kiss
sometimes i try to forget
because ignorance is bliss
thats why fools fall in love
the wise dont wanna get crushed
but i was so intrigued by a touch
but i'm done talkin bout that stuff
but i have moved on
an im attemptin to remain strong
but when i hear a love song
i gotta change the station
why is this world so impatient
by exposin this words
i feel i'm showin myself naked
now i'm religously faithless
chorus: ??
ambigiously interpreted
if you felt these words youd hurt
an nobody deserves to feel what i converse that is certain
paint a picture of the sky
continplait how were livin to die
you should mimic a mime
cause im so sick of ya lies
when she sings that song sound so sweet to me
but i see evil in her eyes body to weak to retreat
speakin through the phone my demons on the other end
he tellin me concur or i'll kill yo family n friends
this is exactly, when, my instanity sets in
i take a deep breath and begin relaxin
but i'm gettin my ass kicked
by the conceptual demons,
as i'm searchin for freedom
but i reall jus need love
to open his door for a second
my chest is bein arrested
gettin dificult to breath
ill be the first contestin
whose only weapon is speech
i pursue that life, yo i neva had as a kid
but other families did,
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