I need a grammar check for a scathing complaint letter to an elementary school regarding proof of residency that I intend to send:
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To Principal XXXXXX XXXXXX or to whom it may concern at XXXXXXX Elementary in MISD regarding Proof of Residency,
A copy of my leasing agreement was brought to the office of XXXXXXX Elementary at approximately 11:30AM on Monday, September 26th 2005 as Proof of Residency for my daughters, XXXXX and XXXXX XXXXXXX.
A message was left the same day on my home cell from a woman from the office at XXXXXXX Elementary stating that the lease brought by and dropped off was dated 2004 and was therefore unacceptable, and that what they was really being looked for was a "utility or light bill".
Coming home with my daughters this past week was a pink piece of paper each. On each piece of paper was mass photocopied letter dated September 19th 2005, signed by Principal XXXXXX XXXXXX stating that it was a second request to turn in a Proof of Residency, and that if a Proof of Residency was not turned in that the students would be automatically withdrawn from the school. Also on the pink letter it irrelevently stated the costs to educate a student at a MISD school.
The request to turn in a Proof of Residency been inconveniently accomodated, with time from a busy schedule taken only to find out that it was not acceptable.
This brings about five clear, highly inconvenient, and glaring problems which are stated as follows:
1. The pink letter that came home with students dated September 19th 2005 clearly stated that acceptable forms of Proof of Residency may include a copy of a utility bill that includes name and address, or a copy of a lease or contract on a residence. With the latter of the two being made available to individuals of XXXXXXX Elementary in MISD, only to be told that it was not an acceptable form of Proof of Residency and what was actually seeked was a utility bill, directly contradicts what the pink letter dated September 19th 2005 stated.
2. Removal of a student from a campus by MISD after the Proof of Residency requirements have been met directly contradicts the State of Texas' requirement for compulory school attendance.
3. Review of both the MISD 2005-2006 Student Code of Conduct and the MISD Elementary Student Handbook have no mention of any sort of Proof of Residency requirements for the child to remain in school. Paperwork sent home at the beginning of the year to be filled out by Parents with contact information, etc, were single copy with English on one side and Spanish on the other. With these filled out and turned in, no copy was left available for the Parent too keep as reference material.
4. On the bottom of the copy of the current lease agreement that was turned into the office of XXXXXXX Elementary was the main office telephone number of the office of the XXXXXX XXXXXX Apartments at XXXX XXXX XXXXXX where the students in question reside, with a contact name available for verification of Proof of Residency.
5. The date on the copy of the lease agreement that was turned in as Proof of Residency to the office of XXXXXXX Elementary had a date of 2004 on it, yet if the lease were reviewed, it would become clear that the lease is for a thirteen (13) month period. This thirteen (13) month period had not expired a the time of the copy of the lease agreement had been turned into the office of XXXXXXX Elementary.
Please review the Proof of Residency that was turned into the office of XXXXXXX Elementary on September 26th and contact me directly if you have any questions or need any sort of clarifications at [insert times available and contact number].
I also request and expect that I be compensated for time and fuel spent for any further versions of a Proof of Residency to be brought to the XXXXXXX Elementary office.
cc: MISD Deputy Superintendent XXXXXXXX XXXXXXXXX, #X XXXXXX Street, XXXXXXXX, TX 7XXXX.
A copy of my leasing agreement was brought to the office of XXXXXXX Elementary at approximately 11:30AM on Monday, September 26th 2005 as Proof of Residency for my daughters, XXXXX and XXXXX XXXXXXX.
A message was left the same day on my home cell from a woman from the office at XXXXXXX Elementary stating that the lease brought by and dropped off was dated 2004 and was therefore unacceptable, and that what they was really being looked for was a "utility or light bill".
Coming home with my daughters this past week was a pink piece of paper each. On each piece of paper was mass photocopied letter dated September 19th 2005, signed by Principal XXXXXX XXXXXX stating that it was a second request to turn in a Proof of Residency, and that if a Proof of Residency was not turned in that the students would be automatically withdrawn from the school. Also on the pink letter it irrelevently stated the costs to educate a student at a MISD school.
The request to turn in a Proof of Residency been inconveniently accomodated, with time from a busy schedule taken only to find out that it was not acceptable.
This brings about five clear, highly inconvenient, and glaring problems which are stated as follows:
1. The pink letter that came home with students dated September 19th 2005 clearly stated that acceptable forms of Proof of Residency may include a copy of a utility bill that includes name and address, or a copy of a lease or contract on a residence. With the latter of the two being made available to individuals of XXXXXXX Elementary in MISD, only to be told that it was not an acceptable form of Proof of Residency and what was actually seeked was a utility bill, directly contradicts what the pink letter dated September 19th 2005 stated.
2. Removal of a student from a campus by MISD after the Proof of Residency requirements have been met directly contradicts the State of Texas' requirement for compulory school attendance.
3. Review of both the MISD 2005-2006 Student Code of Conduct and the MISD Elementary Student Handbook have no mention of any sort of Proof of Residency requirements for the child to remain in school. Paperwork sent home at the beginning of the year to be filled out by Parents with contact information, etc, were single copy with English on one side and Spanish on the other. With these filled out and turned in, no copy was left available for the Parent too keep as reference material.
4. On the bottom of the copy of the current lease agreement that was turned into the office of XXXXXXX Elementary was the main office telephone number of the office of the XXXXXX XXXXXX Apartments at XXXX XXXX XXXXXX where the students in question reside, with a contact name available for verification of Proof of Residency.
5. The date on the copy of the lease agreement that was turned in as Proof of Residency to the office of XXXXXXX Elementary had a date of 2004 on it, yet if the lease were reviewed, it would become clear that the lease is for a thirteen (13) month period. This thirteen (13) month period had not expired a the time of the copy of the lease agreement had been turned into the office of XXXXXXX Elementary.
Please review the Proof of Residency that was turned into the office of XXXXXXX Elementary on September 26th and contact me directly if you have any questions or need any sort of clarifications at [insert times available and contact number].
I also request and expect that I be compensated for time and fuel spent for any further versions of a Proof of Residency to be brought to the XXXXXXX Elementary office.
cc: MISD Deputy Superintendent XXXXXXXX XXXXXXXXX, #X XXXXXX Street, XXXXXXXX, TX 7XXXX.
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